Here's the blurb I wrote for one of the photos for my photography final project which is on female fictional character toys in American pop culture (okay it's just pictures of all my dollies, shut up). I'm really anxious about getting all the facts correct. Do I have the following right?

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WOMEN OF HALO, developed by Bungie Studios
CORTANA – Joyride Halo Series 1 (purple), 2003, McFarlane Halo 3 (blue), 2010
PINK SPARTAN (honorary female) – Joyride Special Edition, 2005
HALO REACH Series 6 KAT – McFarlane Toys 2012
HALO 4 SARAH PALMER – Square Enix 2013, character developed by 343 Industries

The videogame Halo by Bungie launched the Microsoft Xbox gaming system in November 2001. The story features a supersoldier called “Master Chief” who is ordered around by Cortana, a miniature and mostly naked blue-violet Artificial Intelligence hologram. Halo was an instant hit and over the following decade Master Chief and Cortana became icons of the videogame industry. The game's sequel, Halo 2 (2004), introduced online multiplayer mode. Players could choose their avatar armor colors, but female players were stuck playing in male armor. The online machinima web series “Red Vs Blue” introduced a male character wearing pink armor and in 2005 Joyride Studios released a limited edition of 2000 pink Spartan action figures which sold out before they were even released. Female Halo players became increasingly vocal, and groups like “Clan PMS” and “The Frag Dolls” showed that women could play Halo as well as the men. Halo 3 (2007) introduced a female voice variant for multiplayers (but the armor was still male). Finally in Halo: Reach (2010) women could play the campaign in female armor, remarkable for being just as bulky and unflattering as the armor on their male counterparts (rather than skimpy and sexy as in other games aimed at men). In Halo 4 (2012), players could play downloadable missions called “Spartan Ops” as female soldiers under the command of no-nonsense supersoldier Sarah Palmer. Other impressive major female characters in the Halo series include Halo 2’s Commander Keyes, “the ballsiest officer in the fleet”, who dies heroically later in the series, as well as Dr. Halsey, a genius genetic engineer and mastermind of the supersoldier program.

So, is it okay?